What I Learned About Boating School is...

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I, being the genius (~sarcasm~) that I am, volunteered to show my horribly incomplete summary draft in class so you all got to see the incoherent rambles that my brain can conjure! However, always look for a silver lining- I learned a lot of things that I need to fix for my next draft. So yay, free group review for me!

My first problem to fix: knowing when to shut up. Every English/composition class I've taken so far the teacher has heavily pressured me to analyze better, to go deeper, to see something from many points of views. Pros of this conditioning- I can be super annoying in arguments and write a 4 page paper about something that should only take half a page. Cons- I can't write a summary to save my life. Seriously, cutting all the analytical stuff from my draft reduced my 3 page paper to about 4 lines (including title).

Next problem is formatting. A simple fix for most, however I don't have a working laptop and I have to use google docs most of the time with my roommate's laptop. Though I guess I should count my blessings and be happy my roommate lets me borrow it in the first place!

My final huge problem is tone of writing. I switch between first person, third person, past, present, and future tense many times. I don't know why, but it's just a little weird to think of writing this in present tense. I watched the movie, so my brain defaults to "then they did a thing" instead of "the film shows..." and that was difficult to fix.

How did all of your revisions go? I hope my blunder of a draft helped some of you make a better paper!